This is My athlete diary. I wrote this because of how I would have felt if I was a athlete and the feeling that an athlete would feel competing in the underwater hurdles race for Olympics. The hard part about it would have probably been using more higher level words. I also wrote this to learn how to put descriptive detail into my writing.
Hi Alesia. NIce work. I like your descriptive works you put in your writing because it hooked me in.😀
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Alesia,
ReplyDeleteI am Letisha from Tautoro School I like the way you have set out your blog especially with all of your learning that you have learnt. I like the way that you have also presented your writing about athletics hopefully you write more amazing story so that I can keep on reading and commenting on your writing.
Yours Sincerely, Letisha.
Hi Alesia
ReplyDeleteMy name is Ruby I enjoyed reading your story because it had a lot of descriptive words that most people don't have in their blog and for that it hooked me in,but to improve your work I think you should check with a buddy because there are some sentences that don't make sense but other then that great work keep it up.
Hi Alesia I like your information but you font is hard to see and size
ReplyDeleteand the rest is perfect.
From Jorja from Ohaeawai
:) ;)
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